M. C. A. Hogarth ([info]haikujaguar) wrote,
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The Aphorisms of Kherishdar: Thirukedi
The final aphorism... and my favorite. I've been waiting a long time to share this one with you.


THIRUKEDI
M.C.A. Hogarth

osulkedi [noun] -- "minister"; highest rank in Public Servant caste, with few members. Osulked serve Thirukedi (the Emperor) directly, but this is not their distinguishing characteristic, as all Ai-Naidar may be called to serve Him. Osulked are known by their service to anyone in the Empire who asks, no matter their rank or their location. They are often sent by Thirukedi to different communities to offer their services, if it is perceived those communities need special aid.


      There is a special quality to the Guardians who ward the Emperor, so when the nakked swept into my studio my heart seized in my breast and my knees fell from beneath me. I was prostrate before they had finished spilling into the room, bringing their scent of weapon oil and leather with them.
      Into their perfect silence came the whisper of robes and the perfume of incense. Rolled silk hems slid over my hands where I held them outstretched before me on the wooden floor. As I waited, shaking, more people crowded into my little domain: six, ten, twelve, more... ancestors preserve!
      Rustle of robes... then long fingers smoothed through my hair and cupped my jaw, stealing my breath. I kept my eyes downcast as He lifted my face but could not still my shuddering. How often in one's life is one touched by the god of Civilization?
      "Good servant mine," Thirukedi said in the highest Implacable. "I have heard much about you."
      Shock stilled my trembling then.
      "Is he always so?" Thirukedi asked, a hint of gentle amusement in His voice.
      My liege-lord replied. "He serves Civilization, Thirukedi."
      "Look at me," Thirukedi said.
      Speechless at this honor, I looked on His face and found it lined with the work of centuries, with eyes both tender and somehow merry.
      "Is that so, then, Calligrapher?"
      "Yes, Thirukedi," I whispered.
      "It must be," Thirukedi said. "As you have served so well that even I have heard of your talents with pen... and truth."
      I swallowed and He smiled. "Speak your heart."
      "It is all that I long for," I said, stripping the grammars as He asked.
      "And would you be pleased, then, if you were asked to do it for all my Empire?"
      I almost swayed on my knees. At my wild glance, my lord smiled and said, "You are worthy. How could I keep you? Though I would be honored if you would maintain your residence here."
      "What say you, servant mine?"
      What could I say, save yes?
      The dye used to mark Thirukedi's servants is permanent, and poison. But I bowed my head to Him gladly and He painted me once on the nape of the neck, where only He may touch with impunity... and then, rather than the expected abstract design, He painted the signs of Empire on my hands.
      The fever came swiftly afterward, but it was His arms that cradled me until it broke... His arms where I slept.
      I was Farren Nai'Sheviet a'Neriethen-jakkedi: humblest member of my family Sheviet, Public Servant to Neriethen's regal Household and its district. Now I am Farren Nai'Sheviet-osulkedi, and my work belongs to all Ai-Naidar... to Kherishdar itself. I could want nothing else. I could be no one else.
      You and I shall meet again, aunerai. Until then, may you find the place where you belong.


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[info]samhenderson
2007-10-24 06:17 am UTC (link)
Ah, that it's poison -- that made me cry.

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[info]ladytwnks
2007-10-24 09:38 am UTC (link)
thank you. *bows my head to you*

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[info]anamacha
2007-10-24 09:47 am UTC (link)
The fever came swiftly afterward, but it was His arms that cradled me until it broke... His arms where I slept.

This line jerked the tears from me, from a place I did not know there were any to be had.

What do you mean by "stripping the grammars", above that, though? I have a suspicion.

At any rate, thank you.

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[info]archangelbeth
2007-10-24 11:46 am UTC (link)
I'm betting that to strip the grammars means... To dispense with all the polite forms, circumlocutions (e.g., "this one" or "this humble servant, myself"), and fancy language that they use to indicate relative positions and whatnot.


Interesting -- I wonder what other services can be asked. I'd thought of troubleshooters, or Bujold's Imperial Auditors, from the word-definition part.

Horribly, I actually have a teeny, tiny editorial quibble:
Though I would be honored if you would maintain your residence here."
"What say you, servant mine?"


Would it be appropriate to remove the ending quotation-mark from the first paragraph, to indicate that this is the same speaker? It's a rarely seen use, but seems to be the technically correct one (#6 on the list). (...all this, for four pixels. *facepalm*)

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(no subject) - [info]haikujaguar, 2007-10-24 12:13 pm UTC (Expand)
(no subject) - [info]archangelbeth, 2007-10-24 01:30 pm UTC (Expand)
(no subject) - [info]dulcinbradbury, 2007-10-24 02:13 pm UTC (Expand)
(no subject) - [info]silversliver, 2007-10-24 03:05 pm UTC (Expand)
(no subject) - [info]haikujaguar, 2007-10-24 08:15 pm UTC (Expand)
(no subject) - [info]haikujaguar, 2007-10-24 12:19 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]poliphilo
2007-10-24 09:50 am UTC (link)
This is quite simply magnificent.

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[info]aureth
2007-10-24 12:10 pm UTC (link)
Excellent work! I'm looking forward to the chapbook. :)

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[info]haikujaguar
2007-10-24 08:16 pm UTC (link)
I am hoping to have it done in time for Christmas shopping. We'll see. :)

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Extraordinary
[info]tabard
2007-10-24 12:54 pm UTC (link)
I figured I'd want to say it again, but really, thank you so much -- Micah, and Calligrapher -- for sharing these incense stories with us. The world is a better place for them, and I will continue to share them with whoever will read them.

This final aphorism is beautiful. Thirukedi is radiant. Somehow I'm not surprised that he has merry eyes. I don't think one could accomplish what he has without some bit of happiness to keep him going. The Calligrapher's...pride? honor? I'm not sure exactly...but it's palpable, and I'm glad we were allowed to experience it with him. Through all of these stories.

Thank you.

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[info]dulcinbradbury
2007-10-24 02:09 pm UTC (link)
::smiles:: Oh ... this is so lovely I nearly cried.

I do agree with archangelbeth though. I had a little bit of trouble with the same place as I thought there was a change in speaker when there wasn't.

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[info]kyburg
2007-10-24 02:12 pm UTC (link)
These have been so utterly delightful. (And I haven't had an opportunity to donate one blessed thing to it, darn it.)

The only - ONLY - thing that would make it any better, and I'd not ask if if I'd never seen you illustrate - would be (guess) - this as a collection with bookplate illustrations.

I could read them without electricity. *grins*

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[info]haikujaguar
2007-10-24 08:16 pm UTC (link)
Working on it!

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[info]shadesong
2007-10-24 02:12 pm UTC (link)
This brought tears to my eyes, arii. :)

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[info]solcita
2007-10-24 02:21 pm UTC (link)
Lush and beautiful. Thank you.

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[info]lotos_rose
2007-10-24 02:36 pm UTC (link)
This is beautiful. Thank you.

How long do these folks live in *aunerai* years? Do different castes have different lifespans, with Thirukedi living longest of all?

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[info]hummingwolf
2007-10-24 02:37 pm UTC (link)
Luminous and beautiful.

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[info]kyranjaye
2007-10-24 02:52 pm UTC (link)
What a perfect ending to this experience. Thank you for sharing these with us :)

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Share in the joy of your master.
[info]captainq
2007-10-24 04:05 pm UTC (link)
I would be sore wrong not to comment here.

I believe I see the difference. The Calligrapher is the same as he always was, but now he speaks from strength. Perhaps it is because of the position he now holds...but perhaps it is because he has been validated. Our artisan friend here was never weak.

It makes all the difference to be told by my master that I am doing well.

I do imagine that we will meet him again, anyways. He is still alone.

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Re: Share in the joy of your master.
[info]haikujaguar
2007-10-24 08:13 pm UTC (link)
I do imagine that we will meet him again, anyways. He is still alone.

Just so. *points at novel* :)

And for the right reason, even. Good on you!

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Re: Share in the joy of your master. - [info]captainq, 2007-10-24 09:45 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]puffbird
2007-10-24 04:09 pm UTC (link)
Beautifully written.

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[info]floorlamps
2007-10-24 04:13 pm UTC (link)
*applause* A perfect finish to the Aphorisms.

Once again, thank you so much for sharing these with us. I know more than once reading an Aphorism, or rereading a handful of them, has helped me to achieve some quietness of spirit in difficult times.

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[info]manycolored
2007-10-24 04:38 pm UTC (link)
Oh wow... thank you! That was just beautiful. To be offered a position to do so much good with one's own gifts, invited to serve all of Civilization in the most complete and fulfilling way imaginable - what an amazing thing!

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[info]stokerbramwell
2007-10-24 05:20 pm UTC (link)
An incredibly good end to it. Bravo.

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Coda
[info]ysabetwordsmith
2007-10-24 06:10 pm UTC (link)
This is the perfect ending to a brilliant story arc!

There is something special about Thirukedi even from a distance. You have shown us Queens and Emperors before. I enjoy them, but I wouldn't hesitate to tussle with them. Of all your characters, only Thirukedi wakes in me a sense of reverence. I think He touches the Japanese-speaking part of me, which is more caste-conscious than the rest.

I'm sure the tale of Shame and the Calligrapher will be splendid. I would also be interested in the historical tale of how Thirukedi first created Civilization!

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[info]tabard
2007-10-24 08:50 pm UTC (link)
I second that! I'd love to hear how their society came to be!

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[info]razzek
2007-10-24 06:12 pm UTC (link)
This one had me a bit misty eyed... Wonderful! I'm so happy for him!

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[info]dragontdc
2007-10-24 07:37 pm UTC (link)
Beautiful

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[info]tuftears
2007-10-24 08:02 pm UTC (link)
Curiousity compels me to ask, why is the dye poisonous? Is it a necessary trait, or is it selected over other, also permanent dyes, for a reason?

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[info]haikujaguar
2007-10-24 08:12 pm UTC (link)
It's the only way they know to make the marks permanent on something with fur (it might be short fur, but it's still fur). The dye does something odd to the hair follicles... the fur grows in a different color afterwards.

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(no subject) - [info]tuftears, 2007-10-24 08:15 pm UTC (Expand)
(no subject) - [info]haikujaguar, 2007-10-24 08:17 pm UTC (Expand)
But the tradition? - [info]ysabetwordsmith, 2007-10-24 08:29 pm UTC (Expand)
Re: But the tradition? - [info]haikujaguar, 2007-10-24 08:37 pm UTC (Expand)
Re: But the tradition? - [info]ysabetwordsmith, 2007-10-24 09:39 pm UTC (Expand)
(no subject) - [info]kengara, 2007-10-26 03:46 am UTC (Expand)

[info]chilmarkgryphon
2007-10-24 09:13 pm UTC (link)
Calligrapher has name! *squees* Farren is a pretty name.
Also, my inner biology-moron says that perhaps all Ai-Nadir possess genes for the tattoo color(s), but the dye removes any epigenetic markers that might be silencing them.
Yeah.

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[info]ysabetwordsmith
2007-10-25 12:35 am UTC (link)
I was thinking that it would be more like what happens in cats or horses, where certain types of injury can cause the regrown fur to change colors -- usually to white, but occasionally to something darker. The Ai-Naidar do seem to have the capacity for different color schemes, though; white, black, various shades of buff and brown. So it could be a genetic switch.

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[info]thedigitalkuri
2007-10-24 09:15 pm UTC (link)
THAT WAS INCREEEEEDDIBLE.

OH MY GOOODNESS GRACIOUS!~

CAPSLOCK SMASH!!!!

*takes a deep breath* ...

o.o

WOW. Favorite aphorism. Hands down. I would buy the book just for this one, and I deeply, deeply love the others.

<3

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[info]thedigitalkuri
2007-10-24 09:17 pm UTC (link)
.. *ahems* *composing* ... I'll be buying three chap books. One for my mother, who will love your culture, one for the brother, and one for me. <3

I love this world so much. o.o

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[info]cschells
2007-10-24 09:20 pm UTC (link)
Very sweet and poignant... this and the previous were my favorites, I think.

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