M. C. A. Hogarth ([info]haikujaguar) wrote,
@ 2007-05-06 11:24:00
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The Aphorisms of Kherishdar: Revasil
Since I'm working on the novel, here's an aphorism to help illuminate Shame's role in society. This is the incident the Calligrapher mentioned in his discussion with the emperor.


REVASIL
M.C.A. Hogarth

revasil, [ reh vah SEEL ], (noun): a Correction; specifically used in instances where somone has transgressed against the rules of society and must be reminded how they are to act. Correction is not punishment, but an attempt to bring a person back in harmony with their ishas


      Almost I did not take the assignment the eritkedi, the city noble, brought me. "Please," he said. "She has paid the reparations, but she does not understand."
      So I found my client table beneath a client, a pretty eritkedi woman.
      "You know why you are here," I said.
      "You are the instrument of my Correction," she replied.
      I nodded. "Tell me your crime."
      She blushed at the ears. "There was a merchant... he was lovely. I... took liberties with him." When my face remained impassive, she hastened to add, "He did not object!"
      I sighed and went to my shelf, bringing back the merchant's volume of the Book of Precedents. Sitting on my stool, I turned to the section detailing the expected behavior between nobles and merchants, beginning with the fact that a noble may touch a merchant on any part of his body without permission. The eritkedi listened in tense silence until I read that a merchant is allowed to refuse a noble only in matters of his trade... nothing else.
      "Stop," she said, trembling.
      I looked up.
      "I didn't know," she said. "Well, I knew but I didn't."
      "You think you know, but you do not," I said. I returned the book and brought down the volume on city nobles, flipping to the section on the proper behavior toward merchants. This I propped on a stand so that she could read it by turning her head. Then I brought one of my painting oils, mixed with a touch of carmine, and sat again beside her. As a low public servant, I could not dream of touching her; as her instrument of Correction, I was outside those laws, bound instead by the precedents of teaching and shame. This is what allowed me to open her robes to her waist, baring her rarified fur and skin, to gather her tears from her cheeks. I mixed them into my paint and said, "Dictate."
      Her voice stumbled, but she began to read aloud. As she spoke the words, I painted them neatly beneath her collar bones in an unwanted intimacy as corrosive as the one she'd inflicted on the merchant. In scarlet, I wrote her duties onto her breath-soft fur, and as the painting oil reached her skin it stung.
      When I ran out of flesh, I allowed her to stop. Her face was a study in pained remorse, and by that I knew we were done. I closed her robe and stepped back so that she could rise and re-tie her sash.
      She knelt before me as was courtesy but not necessity and rested her cheek on my foot. "I bless the instrument of my Correction," she whispered, as customary.
      "You have known Correction," I said. "You may go."
      Several days later I received a written request for a wall scroll signed with a single smudge of carmine and oil beneath the House sign. Several days later I sent back a work in silver and scarlet, glazed with stinging oil:
      To err is only another chance to know the grace of correction.


The Aphorisms Website.


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[info]moonfire77
2007-05-06 03:50 pm UTC (link)
Your writing on Kherishdar is graceful and beautiful. I wish I could meet the people and walk the streets.

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[info]altonwings
2007-05-06 03:58 pm UTC (link)
Beautifully written; I wonder what limits there are in these corrections, assuming one does not recognize they are not harmonious?

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[info]haikujaguar
2007-05-06 04:22 pm UTC (link)
Limits as in "you are not allowed to beat someone to death" limits?

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[info]altonwings
2007-05-06 04:39 pm UTC (link)
Eek! Although given that most Kherishdar appear to adhere to their social ranks it is hopefully not a very common occurrence.

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[info]haikujaguar
2007-05-06 05:07 pm UTC (link)
There are guidelines for correction, and there are different styles of it, and there are books that involve nothing -but- describing how some crime was corrected (sort of the equivalent for us of reading, oh, a cross between medical case studies and crime novels). The latter are often read by people below the Wall of Birth, but are more commonly found in the libraries of nobles and regals who have many more people for whom they are responsible.

There's also a lot of correction-specific gear. Shame shows up in a lot of his portraits with one or more of them.

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[info]artfulruin
2007-05-06 04:00 pm UTC (link)
I feel how painful this is for the Calligrapher.

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[info]haikujaguar
2007-05-06 04:23 pm UTC (link)
It's not in his nature to be a disciplinarian. That's why he ends up with Shame. :)

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[info]indigo_alamaris
2007-05-06 05:35 pm UTC (link)
Beautiful. This one really resonated with me, for some reason I can't explain.

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[info]miintikwa
2007-05-06 06:21 pm UTC (link)
There is a tenseness to the writing that so clearly displays the Calligrapher's discomfort with this duty... it is well written, arii.

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[info]stokerbramwell
2007-05-06 06:38 pm UTC (link)
Just to make sure I understand what's going on here...is she being Corrected because she did something that she had a right to do already, but feels guilty about?

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(Anonymous)
2007-05-06 07:03 pm UTC (link)
She is being Corrected because she did something that she could not have known was welcome. The merchant has no right to say no to her advances; therefore, she should not have made them, because it's a way of taking advantage of her position and his inability to say no.

This is an abuse of the system, as far as they're concerned.

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[info]stokerbramwell
2007-05-06 07:39 pm UTC (link)
Oh, now I get it. It's so obvious!

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[info]dulcinbradbury
2007-05-06 07:53 pm UTC (link)
It confuses me. By which I mean, I understand, but, I do not understand.

Why is it *allowed* for a noble to touch a merchant anywhere, but, not allowed at the same time? Why is the merchant unable to refuse, while it is considered a wrong at the same time? It is contradictory. The system itself seems setup for this kind of mistaken transgression, if not outright abuse, when *anyone* is bound to silence or complete submission.

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[info]siadea
2007-05-06 08:55 pm UTC (link)
S'not my world or anything, but... I think it goes, 'Just because you can doesn't mean you should.' I don't know why nobles are permitted to touch a merchant anywhere without permission, but having sex with one (or taking similarly strong liberties) when he can't say no is still taking advantage of him and thus wrong.

I guess it's kind of like a doctor or something - they can touch you anywhere for medical reasons, but that doesn't mean they can abuse that ability. (Maybe not the best example, because you can still refuse to let a doctor do a particular examination - my eye doctor hasn't been able to do the one where the machine touches your eye for a good long while now! - but it's kind of similar, at least.)

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[info]haikujaguar
2007-05-06 08:59 pm UTC (link)
[info]siadea has the right of it, more or less. The permission exists for legitimate uses; it can be abused.

The legitimate uses are, of course, a matter of rule and custom...!

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[info]manycolored
2007-05-06 09:04 pm UTC (link)
Shame's feelings about the matter, and the woman's realization are beautiful. But what makes it necessary for a noble to be able to touch any part of a merchant's body without permission? Presumably, there's a legitimate reason, but I can't fathom it.

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[info]archangelbeth
2007-05-07 02:50 am UTC (link)
Hm. If one takes the premise that the current system arose from prior systems (which were less harmonious), then there may simply be... traditional permissions for higher-caste people, which are now hedged in with restrictions so that they do not actually harm. Because when both people are ethical, the potential for abuse is not something to worry about.

In this case, it sounds like she was thoughtless, and the poor merchant was too polite -- a less diligent man might have said, "What? Wait. No." (Or perhaps he was simply too startled and upset to think that someone breaking the unwritten rules (but, I gather, written guidelines) might respond to someone else breaking the written rules. I.e., he could not know if she was abusing her power and position deliberately or thoughtlessly, and if it was deliberate, at least he could have his dignity.)

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[info]floorlamps
2007-05-07 08:08 am UTC (link)
Painful, but... reassuring, oddly. The necessity and the grace of Correction is something I've experienced myself more than once.

Reading this makes me wonder not so much why a noble would be able to touch any part of a merchant's body without permission, but more how that came to be so, and what is the history of these rules and guidelines.

Which also makes me wonder where historians fit in.

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[info]haikujaguar
2007-05-07 03:52 pm UTC (link)
There is, indeed, an incense story involving a historian. :)


Now, at the risk of failing to explain this well, I note that the Ai-Naidar often have rules that should not be broken, merely so that the effort of not-breaking-them reminds an individual of his/her responsibilities and powers.

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[info]tabard
2007-05-07 03:14 pm UTC (link)
This gave me chills. Such a powerful means of correction, to be marked with the rules one has violated. How long does the ink last, I wonder? And the way she acknowledges recognition of her Correction is lovely.

It seems many of the Rules of Precedence are about practicing grace and restraint in the face of what-could-be, in order to make their society work. The rights of nobles over the lesser classes makes sense to me in a way. It wouldn't make me happy if our world was like this today, but weren't there periods in our own history when some form of these laws existed? I think I'm with
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This gave me chills. Such a <i>powerful</i> means of correction, to be marked with the rules one has violated. How long does the ink last, I wonder? And the way she acknowledges recognition of her Correction is lovely.

It seems many of the Rules of Precedence are about practicing grace and restraint in the face of what-could-be, in order to make their society work. The rights of nobles over the lesser classes makes sense to me in a way. It wouldn't make me <i>happy</i> if our world was like this today, but weren't there periods in our own history when some form of these laws existed? I think I'm with <lj-user="floorlamps"> in wanting to know their Kherishdar origins.

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[info]ysabel
2007-05-07 08:26 pm UTC (link)
Your stories disturb me in a way that few do. (And I hope you take that as the compliment it's meant as.)

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[info]haikujaguar
2007-05-07 08:30 pm UTC (link)
They inspire more discussion than I'm accustomed to. I think it's because when I'm writing them, I'm completely there and they seem perfectly sensible to me, the only right way to do things.

Then I come back and realize, 'Woah, these are really bizarre ways of thinking' and all of you crowd in and point and say, "But what if this happens?" and "No, no, what about that?" and "but how do they manage this?" And I realize, 'wow, okay, they are really really really bizarre ways of thinking.' :)

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[info]ysabel
2007-05-07 08:36 pm UTC (link)
I think my low opinion of humans comes into play. It is fundamentally alien to my experience to imagine beings who would not turn the system you describe into a truly hellish experience. Seeing anyone make it work at all leaves me with this vague disquiet, this gut-level certainty that it really is hellish underneath the veneer.

Which, like I said the first time, is a compliment to your writing. That means it feels very real to me, or it wouldn't do that.

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[info]silversliver
2007-05-09 02:57 am UTC (link)
I just wandered over from [info]ozarque's journal this evening. I must say these are powerful pieces. I'm looking forward to continuing reading, and am very interested in the chapbook. Thanks for writing!

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[info]haikujaguar
2007-05-09 03:55 am UTC (link)
*bows* I'm glad to have served. A new one goes up tomorrow morning.

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